- November 7, 2019 at 10:57 am #424223
Image from street workshop. CC?
- November 7, 2019 at 12:05 pm #424230Dahlia AmbroseKeymaster
Hi Petr, this is a nice image, I like it.
You could slightly straighten the platform and crop off the person and the handrail on the right and a bit on the left just after the image in the board. The people in front of the four silhouetted people are distracting, but there isn’t much you can do about it I think as it is street photo 🙂
- November 7, 2019 at 12:12 pm #424234PrestonParticipant
I have to say good timing and composition for this shot. What really love is how the man in the sign appears to be watching the group of four silhouettes. It has a “Big Brother” quality to it. I feel it’s a fantastic use of a perceived leading line that walks me from the brightness of the sign to the darkness of the 4 people.
My main recommendation would be a tighter crop. I feel that the railing and person on the right really don’t add much to the overall photo since they are separate from your main group. Secondly, I would try to take some of the highlights out of the face on the sign to the left. I think you lose a little too much detail in the one eye. Here’s what I quickly came up with.
- November 7, 2019 at 12:21 pm #424237
- November 7, 2019 at 12:21 pm #424235
I think it could be or could have been, improved if it were tighter and more focused on a single moment of action.
I think the areas in purple are unnecessary to your message and composition. I would propose an even tighter composition as indicated in yellow. (I don’t personally see the reflections at the top as being important.
- November 7, 2019 at 1:18 pm #424239
“Big brother”? Yes.
I didn’t crop to keep whole space. I keep railings and silhoutte on the right and wall on the left as eye stoppers.
However I don’t see top reflections as important because very few people mention it. The left sign works well as an eye stopper especially because it plays its role. The right small sign can work as an eye stopper.
Tighter crop makes image more flat. But it is flat from beginning – no any extra layers there. So no problem.
Ok, the second try:
- November 7, 2019 at 2:30 pm #424246
I like this version better. I’m still ambivalent about the sign on the right. I just don’t think it’s necessary as relates to everything else. The person on the far right that is looking to the left (the tiny little head) is enough to force the eyes back inward.
- November 13, 2019 at 5:18 am #424878JasenkaGKeymaster
I also think this crop works better, the original one had a bit too much going on.
- November 15, 2019 at 12:33 am #425006Federico AlegriaParticipant
Now you have it!
- November 7, 2019 at 3:22 pm #424254
ok, thanks for all comments.
- November 22, 2019 at 6:49 pm #425793FalxyParticipant
so maybe keep the poster watcher and the top shadows and crop in the r/h side………..central is not always best………..interesting! 🙂
- November 23, 2019 at 4:25 am #425815MistyisleParticipant
I engaged with the initial comments, Duncan. However, the sign on the right “gets to” me! I would crop it out, as Ken suggests. If you ask yourself, what does this contribute overall, then you have a response!
- November 23, 2019 at 5:25 pm #425861
- November 24, 2019 at 6:10 pm #425925bucweeetParticipant
I joined this one late, but I prefer Kent’s version (which is ‘almost’ this one).
As Kent did, I would remove the black band at the top as it draws my upwards. I also find I’m drawn more into the image. I also find the interaction between the sign and people stronger with Kent’s crop.
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