Please go away

[LightandShadow]

2 fishermen wandering out onto the rocks. Wanted to highlight the sense they are intruding on the person who preceded them and was quietly contemplating the flow of the river in solitude before their arrival. Too much in the frame? Not prominent enough to tell the story?

[Robert Apple]

This really speaks to me, and the number of times I was intruded upon, parking far away and hiking in just to get away from humanity, only to have someone park next to me and find me on the river thinking I knew where the fish were , and rudely intrude on my peace, in Colorado it got so bad you couldn’t cast a line without hooking some fool too inconsiderate to give you any space, Or if I had a camera in hand looking to insert themselves in my photo. Its one of the reasons I left there, it wasn’t just overcrowding, but total lack of consideration for others.
My shark attack was obviously aimed elsewhere and your photo definitely provoked a reaction.

[Patrick]

Thanks for sharing this image Steve. The scene is beautiful, and it’s clear you’ve captured a moment in a lovely location.

I think your goal of highlighting the sense of intrusion is a really compelling idea.

looking at the final image, that specific story doesn’t seem to come across as strongly as you might have hoped.

The wide perspective and the distance between the figures give a sense of shared space rather than a conflict over it.

The person on the left is seated, and their body language is not clear enough to communicate that their solitude is being disturbed. They could simply be resting.
The fishermen are focused on their own activity, and their movement doesn’t read as an encroachment on the seated person’s space. They just appear to be a natural part of the environment.

The result is a tranquil scene with three people in it, rather than a narrative about personal space being invaded. The photograph itself is a great landscape with figures, but the specific story of ‘intrusion’ isn’t fully conveyed by the composition.

I purposefully never suggested what i would do different because this kind of storytelling i would need to be closer at the very least and a change in perspective every scene and situation would require it’s own on the ground approach i believe.

Thank you for posting Steve

[LightandShadow]

Thanks. I think I agree and that the notion is more projection on my part that perhaps even the feeling of the non-fisher.

[Patrick]

It is not an easy thing to achieve mate so never be too hard on yourself , most would struggle drawing that feeling from any scene i know i would and i am sure many more would do as well.

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