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Thank you!

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Thanks for the detailed recommendations. I will have to try these as I did not think to play with contrast and visual weight.

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Thanks Falxy. Sorry – had a busy few days and didn’t get a chance to come back. Thank you for your kind words.

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Thank you for your detailed recommendations. I’m not sure why it says that i’ve requested my images not be adjusted by members. I’d like to see what other people come up with. Is there somewhere I can change that setting? Thanks!

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Interesting suggestions. Didn’t think to dodge and burn. I will try that and post a pic. It’s a little harder for me since this was on my iPhone and I haven’t figured out how to get from the phone to the computer yet.

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Thanks for the suggestion. I wanted to keep the square aspect ratio though, but maybe that isn’t so important to get a much stronger picture

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Thanks MaryAnne! I admit I tend to resist suggestions to crop in different ways because I think it destroys my visions, but I will look into your suggestions. I wanted to keep the square crop, and find if I crop at the top and bottom, too much is taken off the sides as well. I will try this though, and see what it looks like.

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Royal Bank building

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The Royal Bank building

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Thanks everybody.

@conkerwood – In fact I don’t think they were having an acrimonious conversation. They were just hanging out and they were laughing quite a bit. I guess I was lucky to capture that one split second when she looked annoyed, and with her t-shirt, it was just too good a story not to post.

I usually like b&w, especially when the background is too busy, but I liked the colours in this one with the pale yellow and blue.

She is on the thinner side, but I think her t-shirt with the black back makes her look even scrawnier – my first reaction too was “wow – so skinny”, until I saw the black.

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I don’t see an image.

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Thanks everyone for your comments. I agree, there is a little too much brick on the left. I’ll play around with cropping it out. I was looking for bright highlights in the tunnel opening, but from the comments, I see that was a failed experiment. I will play around with it and see if I can rescue some of the highlights for a more palatable feel.

On working with the image, I really wanted the centre of attention to be the man entering the tunnel – I thought with the lighting, there was a sense of mystery to who he was and what he would do next. However, naming this the violinist does defeat that intent – lol.

I’ll work on this again and see if I can make it more interesting. It’s one of my images I like in concept but can’t get to work in practice.

I like the tip of crouching and taking the photo – will keep that in mind going forward.

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I like the concept, and tend to shoot a lot of these negative space photos from the same perspective as well. I find it’s really hard to capture the visual in your head. Couple of suggestions that may improve this –
1. Portrait layout instead of landscape – to mirror the vertical lines of the building
2. More cloud so it feels like it’s a part of the picture, and not just a stray element that is overlooked
3. More building and a little more to the left, not centred though. The sky still takes up most of the space in the photograph, but the building has a presence as well.

That might help convey some of your vision.

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Have you tried flickr?

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Thanks Kent. This was exactly what I was going for, but with all the other replies I thought maybe I failed in the execution.

This was a high key photoshoot to start with, so I’m glad you pointed this out. I have toned down the shirt and the neck a little, will post the result when I get home.

(BTW – I entered this into a local competition. It was probably the most polarizing submission – it scored the lowest scores by one judge and one of the highest by another. It was interesting to get both points of view that night. All I can say is if it elicited such strong, diverse reactions, my job is done 🙂 )

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Thanks for the comments. I’ll try the suggestions tonight

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I want to like this – I like minimalist photography – but something is missing. I feel like the size and placement of the man is off. Maybe try not placing him so squarely in the rule of third point and try a little off-centre in all directions and see what works? Also, when I view the larger image, it looks like the man was pasted onto the background. Maybe something in the post-processing?

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How would a portrait orientation have looked instead of a square crop and keeping the steeple centred? I feel like there needs to be a little more negative space above the steeple.

Regarding the vignetting – it’s not giving me enough of that omenous feel, instead it just looks like heavy vignetting. Maybe play with the intensity – go darker and see if that helps?

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Thanks Kent. I followed Lenny’s advice and cropped it in from the left and brought the whites down so the sky isn’t so blown out. Reposted to Flickr, but seems like it broke the link to this post.

Thanks for the follow on Flickr

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Thank you. I don’t think the sky is blown out. Will see if I can get more detail into it. Thanks for the feedback!

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