Tick….Tock

[Philip Watts]

Sometimes you have to be brave! If you are not prepared to share your visions, then what is the point?

I am not expecting anyone to actually LIKE this picture, but it speaks to me so I share it for comments, both photographic and artisitic.

Cheers

 

[Peter]

As a pic it nearly works for me but there are a number of small distractions which I find quite off putting. On the right hand side the white curve just below the shoulder immediately grabs my eye. Why is it there? The highlight on the end of the nose is equally distracting. You have gone for symmetry in composition but because the symmetry is just a little off ( ie his shoulder on the right is cut, the alarm clock is not quite vertical) it really sticks out. And the clock behind his head is out of round, it is distorted. Does that matter? Normally no but in this composition I think it does. And the blacks around the clock are quite crushed, a little detail showing would have been good, as it is it is just a black void. But my biggest concern is how flat the face indeed the whole pic appears. Ample opportunity for dodging and burning to give some solidity and depth. So are my thoughts completely negative? No. It is, for me, a near miss which is worth another go for what is potentially a striking image. I would also suggest that challenging us with ‘I don’t expect anyone to actually like this picture’ serves no purpose other than to provide a sort of preprotection against criticism. Why shouldn’t I like the image? I think it has potential.

 

I hope this helps

[Erik Fransman]

Peter said it all. I agree. Good first try. Image with potential.

[beth]

peter has some great observations & suggestions.

the lines in the background clock are bigger, bolder and sharper than the man in front.  i keep looking at that instead of him.  make the background a little more blurry and less contrasty and it’ll work better.  also, there’s a weird green & blue blotchiness on the man’s shoulder on the right side of the image.

[Philip Watts]

Thank you all so much for the comments, especially Peter’s critque.

A flatness within my images seems to be a commom theme, so I am working on my didge and burn skills to help with that. I also need to pause and review my images with a more detached eye before I consider them complete.

I have tried to take onboard your comments and have re-visited the image and my new “final” version is below. I do think it is an improvement.

Time now to move on to the next challange.

Thanks again.

Philip

[Falxy]

Well wow or wow well……………..Like it a bit….bitten but not bitumen……gold man! 🙂

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